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Edited by Josh Cooray, Jan 29, 2012 - 00:03.
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Posted Jan 28, 2012 - 22:35
Josh Cooray
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Can anyone read this over a plan of investigation and give some feedback? thanks
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Posted Jan 28, 2012 - 23:12
Emy Glau-ski
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The length seems to be fine, although I would rewrite this. It's not bad, but:
1. You don't really cover the 'how you will carry out this IA' part well. State how you will use your sources. Try to redo those last few sentences.
2. I would reword it to not include writing in the first person. Do it in the third person instead. I don't know, it just doesn't seem as professional using 'I.'
3. Take out the "my interest in this particular topic..." part. It's just BS and is taking up word count. Unless your teacher told you to do this, in which case your teacher is just making you use up your words.
4. I'm not sure how true this is, but it might be a good idea to include the two sources you will be evaluating in Part C. A lot of the sample IAs that scored well had these included in it. Perhaps you could do this as well?
Just some suggestions. Also, I'd be careful with posting parts of your history IA on the internet as plagiarism might be an issue.
1. You don't really cover the 'how you will carry out this IA' part well. State how you will use your sources. Try to redo those last few sentences.
2. I would reword it to not include writing in the first person. Do it in the third person instead. I don't know, it just doesn't seem as professional using 'I.'
3. Take out the "my interest in this particular topic..." part. It's just BS and is taking up word count. Unless your teacher told you to do this, in which case your teacher is just making you use up your words.
4. I'm not sure how true this is, but it might be a good idea to include the two sources you will be evaluating in Part C. A lot of the sample IAs that scored well had these included in it. Perhaps you could do this as well?
Just some suggestions. Also, I'd be careful with posting parts of your history IA on the internet as plagiarism might be an issue.
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Posted Jan 29, 2012 - 00:04
Josh Cooray
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Thanks! actually, yer my history teacher did tell me to do that part to explain why i'm interested in the topic... and i changed it already.
actually, yer my history teacher did tell me to do that part to explain why i'm interested in the topic... and i changed it already.
