evangelouise Posted November 18, 2014 Report Share Posted November 18, 2014 (edited) Hello. My EE is under Psychology and my topic is on attachment and its contribution to the formation of relationships between people. I think that understanding attachment during childhood plays a crucial role in the formation of adult relationships. Thus, I was able to come up with this. I just finished writing my Introduction and I was hoping if you could give me constructive criticisms. Thank you. Edited November 18, 2014 by evangelouise Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
ibprincess Posted November 18, 2014 Report Share Posted November 18, 2014 Criterion A: The research question is clearly stated in the introduction and sharply focused, making effective treatment possible within the word limit.you didn't do this Criterion B: The context of the research question is clearly demonstrated. The introduction clearly explains the significance of the topic and why it is worthy of investigation I think you did this pretty well. I also think you need more citations--your second paragraph defines relationships but without citations, the marker will think you pulled that definition out of your butt.. Other than that, it's good. It has a nice flow and I think it has potential. Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sofia. Posted November 18, 2014 Report Share Posted November 18, 2014 Hello. My EE is under Psychology and my topic is on attachment and its contribution to the formation of relationships between people. I think that understanding attachment during childhood plays a crucial role in the formation of adult relationships. Thus, I was able to come up with this. I just finished writing my Introduction and I was hoping if you could give me constructive criticisms. Thank you. Please, never upload anything on fora that you are going to submit to the IBO. If you're unlucky, other students will plagiarize it. Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
evangelouise Posted November 18, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 18, 2014 Hello. My EE is under Psychology and my topic is on attachment and its contribution to the formation of relationships between people. I think that understanding attachment during childhood plays a crucial role in the formation of adult relationships. Thus, I was able to come up with this. I just finished writing my Introduction and I was hoping if you could give me constructive criticisms. Thank you. Please, never upload anything on fora that you are going to submit to the IBO. If you're unlucky, other students will plagiarize it. gosh, I never thought of that. Thank you so much for this. I'll put it down Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
evangelouise Posted November 19, 2014 Author Report Share Posted November 19, 2014 Criterion A: The research question is clearly stated in the introduction and sharply focused, making effective treatment possible within the word limit.you didn't do this Criterion B: The context of the research question is clearly demonstrated. The introduction clearly explains the significance of the topic and why it is worthy of investigation I think you did this pretty well. I also think you need more citations--your second paragraph defines relationships but without citations, the marker will think you pulled that definition out of your butt.. Other than that, it's good. It has a nice flow and I think it has potential.Okay, I'll remember that. thank you! Reply Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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